[olshanski]

Thank you for the review.

I would prefer if you had fewer asides in your review. I don't know if it was intentional and making fun of the adventure for beating around the bush, but the review kept interrupting itself, and the constant interruptions made it harder to enjoy.

Examples:
Never mind, let's see what your party will be up against. But first, let's see what your players know.

Don't get carried away though, the adventure hasn't started yet.

Again, we still haven't started. We get to see the treasure sytem first.


Instead of telling me what you intend to tell me at a later time. Just give me the review.