Post originally by Belphanior at 2003-05-13 06:40:13
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Sorry to say this, but the review was kind of a let down. Apart from the lack of capitaliztion at the start of a new sentence, there's some annoying typos as well.

Worse, there are quite a few errors and holes.
The Primordeals did *not* consist out of Yozis and Malfeans. The Primordeals who were killed became Malfeans. Those that were imprissoned became Yozis.
There are only 2 real Primordeals left: Gaia and Autochthon.
The Yozi did NOT hide. They were forcibly locked up by the gods. Similary, the Malfeans were NOT locked up in a realm of their own. They were Primordeals that died, but because the world was less than they were, it could not contain them, and they sunk into a new world of death: the Underworld.

No mention is made of where the US, Luna, and the Maidens came from. Pity, because it is quite important to know that they were made by the Primordeals in the first place.

The Scarlet Empress ruled for more than 700 years, but not for 1000. Also, it has been 5 years since she disappeared, not 2.

The Houses do not fight amongst themselves for the throne (yet).

Stunts, while so important and refreshing a mechanic, are not mentioned either.

Ad nauseum.


All in all, a very poor review I must say.


Belphanior
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